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Kitanadelapin

    (25/06/2019 at 10:21)
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CHARACTER INFORMATION
Character Name: Kitana Charlotte Delapin

Gender: female

Age: 11

Bloodline:
Pureblood
Parents/Guardians (Are they currently played characters?): 
Orphaned until someone adopts her

Residence:
Type your response here - where does your character live?wools orphanage London

Do you plan to have a connection to a particular existing place (for example: the daycare)?
None

Do you wish to be approved as a group with any other characters? If so who and for what IC reason?
none .

Please list any other characters you already have at the site:
none.

Biography: (100 words ):Kitana Charlotte Delapin was left as an orphan when her  family was killed in a gruesome attack at her family home the only way she survived is being hidden by elf magic so she couldnt be killed  when the magice wore off she fled and ended up being taken to wools orphanage in london which where she remains till today she doesn't like being in an orphanage cause she knows she is different and that she can do strange and wonderful things but she hides it because she feels like she would get bullied amd picked on and have mean name calling on her

Roleplay: kitana delapin grew up in an orphanage where she was bullied and picked on for being different until she received her hogwarts letter and she made her way to the leaky cauldron and asked for help to get into diagon alley and to get to Gringotts  for her inheritance test and to get her school supplies and trunk and pet and a wand.

* Calypso Ross

    (29/06/2019 at 11:10)
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Hi Kitana, welcome to the site!

Your application looks good so far, there's just a few things we'll need to address before we can get you accepted.

Firstly, if you'd like to edit your username from 'Kitanadelapin' to 'Kitana Delapin' (which is the standard format we use here), you can submit a helpdesk ticket here requesting the change, and an admin will fix that for you.

Secondly, in your biography, you mention that Kitana's family was killed in an attack and that she survived due to being hidden by elf magic. This is something that would probably require a special request, as it falls under 'potentially horrific, confusing, or complicated plotlines' (as outlined in our special requests FAQ). If you would like to keep this part of Kitana's history, you will need to submit a special request for this background. Rather than filling out the traditional request form, which is more tailored towards special powers, you can simply PM a more detailed explanation of this section of Kitana's history (particularly the part involving elf magic) to an admin for approval. Please note that submitting a special request does not guarantee approval, and you may still need to edit Kitana's biography if the admins do not approve your request. If you would rather not submit a special request for this, you can also choose to edit Kitana's history into something more 'ordinary' that would not require a special request.

Thirdly, your RP sample seems to be a stand-alone sample, rather than a response to the prompt provided in the application template. You'll need to rewrite this sample so that you are responding to the character Janey in Godric Park. You should interact with her like you would in a thread with a played character, which means you shouldn't powerplay any of her actions, only Kitana's. You should also have Kitana stay in the interaction at the end of your post, which would leave room for Janey to reply (if she were a played character). You may find it useful to read through the sample applications (particularly this one and this one) if you're unsure about how to respond.

Once you have made the required changes, please repost your entire revised application below, and we'll be happy to take another look! If you have any questions or need any help with your application, please don't hesitate to PM me or another admin. Thanks!

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