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Naomii Lockwood

    (25/04/2016 at 03:37)
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Name: Naomii Lockwood
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Birthday: November, 17
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Hometown: Reykjavik, Iceland
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Bloodline: Unknown
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Magical Strength: Conjuring & Summoning
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Magical Weakness: Divination
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Year: 1st
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Biology: Naomii was dropped off at a local orphanage in Reykjavik at the age of 2. She was taken into the orphanage, oblivious to the harsh things that would happen when she grew up. 9 years of labor inside of the poorly constructed walls of the orphanage later, Naomii received a letter to go to Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. Nana, the caretaker of the orphanage forbaid the leaving of the young girl. So, she packed her things and snuck out. She, somehow, found a way to sneak into a plane to London without anyone noticing her arrival.

 Finding a way to get into the luggage area of the plane, she snuck into a small corner that was cluttered with luggage and stayed there for the remainder of the flight. 2 agonizingly long hours later, she arrived at London. Stealthily sneaking into the airport, she accidentally ran into a very large man with a scruffy black beard. "Aye, 'ou wouldn' be Naomii Lockwood, would ya'?" The tall man said. The small girl nodded, silently contemplating whether she should run or stay and hear what he had to say. "Well, lassie, 'ou've been selected ta be put inta' Hogwarts." Naomii smiled, knowing that she had found the right man. "Thank you, sir," Naomii said in her Icelandic accent. "What is your name?" She asked. "Aye, me name is Hagrid, las." Naomii nodded. "Now, let's get ou' to ta train station ta get to Hogwarts." "Ok."

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House Request: Ravenclaw

Personality: Naomii was never really the out standing kind of girl. She was picked on in the orphanage due to her love of books and art. She's shy, stotic, and introverted but still has a very caring side.

Appearance: Naomii has long, abnormal black hair, considering the fact that she is Icelandic, and orange-ish red eyes. She has thick black rimmed glasses and rarely ever wears contacts. She is short but very petite for a girl her age.

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Option 1 Responce:
The small ravenette wandered around the long, dark corridors, listening to the echoes of her black Mary Janes hitting the floor each time she stepped. She sighed and scanned the walls with her amber eyes, hoping there was something she could entertain her self with. She took out a book about potions from her satchel and started reading, engrossing herself with the facts of potions. About 3 minutes later of reading she accidentally ran into a wall, and with a thud! she fell onto the ground. She heard a faint "H-h-hello?" Naomii perked up with surprise, only to hid her head on a low chained lamp, looming above her. "Hello! Is Emma Birch here?" A feminine voice yelled, causing Naomii to jump once again. "N-no, just me..."

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* Anneka Ivanova

    (26/04/2016 at 00:38)
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Hi Naomii!

Thanks for your interest in our site! Before we can accept your application, there are few things you'll need to change.

Your username needs to match your character's name, Naomii Lockwood. You don't need a new account, though. If you fill out a helpdesk ticket, we can change your username for you.

In your biography, you mention Naomii meeting Hagrid.
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Given that this is an alternate universe of Harry Potter, no characters from the books (nor their relatives) will be accepted. You are not allowed to have Potter anywhere in your character's name, nor are you related to him in any way.
Please remove any references to Hagrid.

Once you've made these changes, please post your entire revised application below, and we'll be happy to take another look!
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to those who ground me, take a message back from me
tell them how I am defying gravity

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(25/04/2016 at 03:37)
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Hey, I have reviewed this as best as I can and have sent a ticket to the staff. If there is anything more I need to change, you can tell me. Thanks!
Name: Naomii Lockwood
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Birthday: November, 17
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Hometown: Reykjavik, Iceland
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Bloodline: Unknown
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Magical Strength: Conjuring & Summoning
---
Magical Weakness: Divination
---
Year: 1st
---
Biology: Naomii was dropped off at a local orphanage in Reykjavik at the age of 2. She was taken into the orphanage, oblivious to the harsh things that would happen when she grew up. 9 years of labor inside of the poorly constructed walls of the orphanage later, Naomii received a letter to go to Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry. Nana, the caretaker of the orphanage forbade the leaving of the young girl. So, she packed her things and snuck out. She, somehow, found a way to sneak into a plane to London without anyone noticing her arrival.

 Finding a way to get into the luggage area of the plane, she snuck into a small corner that was cluttered with luggage and stayed there for the remainder of the flight. 2 agonizingly long hours later, she arrived at London. Stealthily sneaking into the airport, she accidentally ran into a rather thin boy around the age of 23. He had brown shaggy hair and blue eyes. "Hey, you wouldn't be Naomii Lockwood, would you?" The thin adult said. The small girl nodded, silently contemplating whether she should run or stay and hear what he had to say. "Well, Nao, I've been sent here by the Headmaster to pick you up and bring you back to Hogwarts." Then he took out a letter from his pocket, confirming that he was, indeed, sent from the Headmaster. Naomii smiled, knowing that she had found the right man. "Thank you, sir," Naomii said in her Icelandic accent. "What is your name?" She asked. "Oh, sorry, my name is Alex. Alex Boshiski." Naomii nodded. "Oh no, I almost forgot. We should probably start heading to the train station! We can't miss Hogwarts Express." "Ok then, let's get going." Then, they were off.

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House Request: Ravenclaw

Personality: Naomii was never really the out standing kind of girl. She was picked on in the orphanage due to her love of books and art. She's shy, stotic, and introverted but still has a very caring side.

Appearance: Naomii has long, abnormal black hair, considering the fact that she is Icelandic, and orange-ish red eyes. She has thick black rimmed glasses and rarely ever wears contacts. She is short and very petite for a girl her age.

~~~~~~<>~~~~~~<>~~~~~~
Option 1 Responce:
The small ravenette wandered around the long, dark corridors, listening to the echoes of her black Mary Janes hitting the floor each time she stepped. She sighed and scanned the walls with her amber eyes, hoping there was something she could entertain her self with. She took out a book about potions from her satchel and started reading, engrossing herself with the facts of potions. About 3 minutes later of reading she accidentally ran into a wall, and with a thud! she fell onto the ground. She heard a faint "H-h-hello?" Naomii perked up with surprise, only to hid her head on a low chained lamp, looming above her. "Hello! Is Emma Birch here?" A feminine voice yelled, causing Naomii to jump once again. "N-no, just me..."

-/:||:\-
Previous Characters?: Nope.

How I found this website: The googs (Google)

* Anneka Ivanova

    (29/04/2016 at 12:50)
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Thanks for making those changes!

Even though it's no longer Hagrid, there's still a problem with someone "being sent by the Headmaster". Hogwarts has a Headmistress, you see, and there's no one named Alex Boshiski that works at the school. It's unlikely that Naomii would have been found so quickly after arriving in the country. Then it would be more likely the Ministry of Magic that would've discovered her. Also, where will she stay when Hogwarts is not in session? Will she be sent to another orphanage? Will a family adopt her? If she was found by the Ministry, it's likely she would be sent to an orphanage.

Orange-ish red eyes are not a normal eye color. Why does she have this color? You may need to submit a request for this.

Please post your entire revised application below and we'll take another look!
and if I'm flying solo, at least I'm flying free
to those who ground me, take a message back from me
tell them how I am defying gravity

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