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Lana Lancaster

    (19/04/2014 at 22:24)
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Several things to clarify:

1. Having read more carefully the premise of the Warp, I now realise my character Elsa Baudelaire is not applicable to this universe. Therefore, I have completely altered her background and personality. I would like, if possible, to also change her name to Lana Lancaster.

2. About the Hospital Wing, I just assumed since we're dealing with WWII, Hogwarts might be volunteering to help wounded wizard soldiers. Anyway, it's just a suggestion, so I'll change my sample RP too.







Application for Hogwarts School




→ CHARACTER INFORMATION.
Name:
Lana Lancaster
Birthday:
November 6, 1965/1927
Hometown:
Littlehampton, West Sussex
Bloodline:
Muggleborn

Magical Strength (pick one):
Charms

Magical Weakness (pick one):
Divination

Year (pick two):
5th, but I can do 4th or 6th as well
Biography:
Lana Lancaster was born in Littlehampton, West Sussex, to muggle parents Harold and Maude Lancaster. Her father was a parish council member and her mother was the headmistress of an elite high school. Her father had a distant cousin - Miss Chiltern, who was a witch and a good friend of his, so he was familiar with the magical world. That is why, after the Time Warp, Lana didn’t get the same treatment as the rest of the muggleborn children. She was sent off to live with Miss Chiltern, who was also the headmistress of an orphanage for muggleborns. The orphanage was famous for being more tolerant than other facilities of the sort. Although she wasn't forced to wear a blood status badge like the rest of the children, Lana quickly became friends with them and sympathized with them. It all changed after Miss Chiltern’s untimely death. A new headmaster was assigned and Lana lost her privileges. She was forced to wear a blood status badge, just like everyone else, and was subject to severe segregation.
Things started looking slightly better for her when she was enrolled in Hogwarts. She met fellow sympathizers and became a member of FEW. One of her regular activities is to visit orphanages, making sure that muggleborn children aren’t neglected or abused. Since the beginning of WWII, she’s been volunteering in St. Mungo’s, taking care of wounded soldiers. 
Lana is a bright student and a promising witch. She excels in performing charms and is quite good at making potions. Her one weakness is divination – she can’t wrap her head around it and remains suspicious about its effectiveness. Lana is also a reporter for the school newspaper. She writes mainly about WWII and the FEW movement. She also writes short stories for children but reads them only to children in orphanages. She aspires to become a war correspondent or an accomplished novelist.

→ ADDITIONAL INFORMATION.
Note: This section is optional, and is up to you to complete.

House Request:
Gryffindor or Hufflepuff
Personality:
Despite her unfortunate situation, Lana has always been a cheerful and friendly person. She is very compassionate and cares deeply for the lives of others. She can be very stubborn and gets really upset when she fails to get her own way. She loves reading, especially history books. She hates routine and needs to be on the move all the time. She prefers the company of boys, since she's been picked on by other girls about her boyish appearance. However, she tends to be quite awkward around boys she fancies. Her natural clumsiness doesn't help much, either.
Appearance:
Lana has a fair skin, grey eyes and black, shoulder-lenght hair. She is of average height and quite skinny. When she was younger, she had short hair and was often confused for a boy because of her lack of curves. It wasn't before third year that she decided to grow her hair out long and start dressing more feminine. Lana bears a striking resemblance to actress Millie Perkins.

→ SAMPLE ROLEPLAY.
Please reply to one of the Sample Roleplays below.

Option 2
Lana turned around and recognised a familiar face. It was Astrid, her fellow reporter for The Spellbound. "Hey, Astrid, how's it going?", she said cheerfully. "You're doing the food column again this week, aren't you? Well, let me take a moment to think about it." She gazed at the empty corridor, trying to remember the last time she ate frog legs. Astrid's quill was jumping impatiently forward and backward, waiting for an answer.
"Right, well, I think they're OK. Initially I was pretty grossed out by the idea of eating frog parts, but they actually don't taste that differently from, say, chicken. I think most people haven't even tried frog legs and are biased against them." As the quill was writing down her thoughts, Lana was tempted to peek into Astrid's parchment but she knew it wasn't polite. "Is that quill of yours still misquoting people? You should try to dip it into Veritaserum", Lana said jokingly. "Anyway, it was nice talking to you. Good luck with your article!"
The two girls parted ways and Lana rushed off to class.

→ ABOUT YOU.

Previous Characters (if applicable):
N/A
How did you find us?:
http://www.toprpsites.com/category/Harry-Potter/
« Last Edit: 28/04/2014 at 09:36 by Lana Lancaster »

* Isabelle Valentine

    (20/04/2014 at 23:56)
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Hi Elsa!

First of all, welcome to Hoggies! Your application looks like it's off to a good start, but there are a couple of small things I'd like some clarification on before we get you all accepted.

Mainly, I'm just curious as to why Elsa thinks her parents were murdered. You included the Time Warp, which is wonderful! I'm just having a hard time following how Elsa came to that conclusion in light of the information we have available about the Warp, since the Warp wasn't triggered by a desire to "take out" any one wizard or family.

I'd really love to know more about Aunt Josephine in general - how is she related to Elsa? Whose aunt is she? Why did she disappear when Elsa went to catch the train? You don't have to answer all of these questions, but it's something to consider in fleshing out your background a little!

Also, this is a minor thing, but it seems like in your RP sample, Elsa thinks that injured soldiers would be house and treated in the Hospital Wing. The Hospital Wing is actually more for injured and sick students - like the school nurse's office - while injured wizarding soldiers would be treated at St Mungo's. Just something to keep in mind!

If you could clarify Elsa's history just a little bit, that would be great. You can edit your original post or add revisions here, and we'd be happy take another look! Also, if you need help with how the Warp works, feel free to PM me or another staff member and we'll get you sorted.

Thanks!

Isabelle Valentine,
Head of Ravenclaw

Somewhere out my doorway, somewhere down my block,
I can hear his heart beat in rhythm with my clock

W E  W E R E  B U I L T  T O  L A S T
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Lana Lancaster

    (24/04/2014 at 18:39)
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Hi Isabelle! Or should I call you Miss Valentine?

Thank you for your constructive criticism. I've reread the specifics of the Time Warp and realised that my character Elsa Baudelaire isn't fit for this universe, so I've basically created a new character. Hope I've got it right this time.
« Last Edit: 24/04/2014 at 18:51 by Elsa Baudelaire »

* B. Llewellyn Thatcher

    (26/04/2014 at 23:56)
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Elsa/Lana,

Thank you for looking over our recommendations, you're new application is coming along nicely! Just a couple of things.

First of all, if you would like to change Elsa's name to Lana (which is completely fine), we will need you to submit a helpdesk requesting the name change.

Secondly, I want to take a moment to look at this:

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Due to his position as a city governor, her father was well known in the Littlehampton magical society, as well as in the muggle one.

Could you expand on this a little bit on this relationship, as I believe that it is a bit too ambiguous? As just a 'city governor,' why do you think the magical community would take such in interest in forming a relationship with him? Typically this type of relationship is between the Minister of Magic and someone with high status in the muggle world, such as the Prime Minister and then things are filtered down through the chain. Feel free to elaborate on this, or you may remove it altogether (it's up to you)!

Thirdly, there is some powerplaying in your roleplay response. Keep in mind that you may only control your character in your response. When you say that Lana took a peak at Astrid's parchment, you are assuming that Astrid would allow you to look at the parchment while the quill was writing. Perhaps Astrid would respond by covering the parchment so that Lana couldn't see it? Also, technically the quill would be controlled by Astrid as well (as it belongs to her), so unless her post stated that it wrote something about 'bias against Muggleborns', you wouldn't be able to say that the quill wrote it.

If you could take a look at these few things, then re-post your application, that would be fantastic!

- B.

Lana Lancaster

    (28/04/2014 at 09:39)
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Okay, I edited it again. I think there is no powerplay anymore. I also slightly changed the father's backstory. I really hope this time everything is correct.

* B. Llewellyn Thatcher

    (29/04/2014 at 00:56)
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Miss Lancaster,

Congratulations, your application to Hogwarts School has been accepted. Term begins 01 May 2014. Currently, students have gathered at Camp Loki. Your admission is joint for both the school and Camp Loki, and we encourage you to spend your summer there. Should you choose, you may also visit our Elsewhere board via the Floo Network to visit or purchase school supplies. We look forward to seeing you at the School.


Regards,
B. Llewellyn Thatcher,
Ravenclaw House Ghost/Duelling Coordinator
It's getting away from you again,
While you're chasin' ghosts.
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