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Mr Werdsworth,

Congratulations, your application to Hogwarts School has been accepted. Term begins 01 May, 2013. Currently, students have gathered at Camp Loki. Your admission is joint for both the school and Camp Loki, and we encourage you to spend your summer there. Should you choose, you may also visit our Elsewhere board via the Floo Network to visit or purchase school supplies. We look forward to seeing you at the School.


Regards,
Eirwen Medraut,
Counsellor and Head of Humanities, Beauxbatons

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Archived Applications / Re: Coco Swaan
« on: 30/04/2013 at 10:21 »
Hello Coco,

Your application looks great! :) I just have one small question about Coco and Luca. The time warp was a year and a half ago, where have they lived since then? In an orphanage? Foster home?

Please clarify this and repost the application in this thread, and we'll be happy to look it again. :)

As for what to do with Luca when Coco starts at Beauxbatons, it is quite likely that he could get transferred to a wizarding orphanage near Beauxbatons, and it might then be possible for Coco to get permission to visit him during term. As he is only 9, he will naturally not be allowed to start school yet, but there is also the option of them both getting adopted into another wizarding family at some point. That is all up to you! :)

- Eirwen Medraut

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Archived Applications / Re: Draconia Yule Ellewood
« on: 27/04/2013 at 09:14 »
Miss Ellewood,

Congratulations, your application to Hogwarts School has been accepted. Term begins 01 May, 2013. Currently, students have gathered at Camp Loki. Your admission is joint for both the school and Camp Loki, and we encourage you to spend your summer there. Should you choose, you may also visit our Elsewhere board via the Floo Network to visit or purchase school supplies. We look forward to seeing you at the School.


Regards,
Eirwen Medraut,
Head of Humanities, Beauxbatons


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Archived Applications / Re: Dewdrops Nyzx Cassiopea
« on: 26/04/2013 at 13:05 »
Hi Dewdrops! :)

Before we can accept your application there's just a few things to address.

First of all, you'll need to make a separate account for Dewdrops. You can make a subaccount to Draconia's profile by following the steps in this guide: Create Subaccount

Please also be aware that according to the site rules all appearances such as hair, skin and eye colour must be kept in natural colours. There is nothing to say that Dewdrops, when she is skilled enough at transfiguration, might try to transfigure her hair green for a shorter period of time! (Just be aware that she might get in trouble with her professors for doing so as the school rules at Beauxbatons don't permit unnatural hair colour.)

Your roleplay response is looking great - but it's very dialogue dense. Could you please try to describe more of Dewdrop's thoughts and actions? You could for example try to explain how the girls' comment not to mind Hilary made her feel, or what she felt when the food was dropped on her. This both makes your posts more interesting for the reader, and it also helps us to really begin to understand your character which is necessary when sorting her :)

In your roleplay response you are also mentioning that Dewdrops is seeing Hilary's aura. Seeing someone's aura requires some preparation as well as for Dewdrops to be holding her wand, and it is unlikely that younger students can see more than just a grey outline or bright colours in an aura - the strong emotion.
However, it could very well be that she has used her danger sense instead, and has had a vague idea that something is going to happen, or a feeling that she needs to take care of something. For further information about  how to use divination in our universe, please see the magical rules. :)

Please address these issues and post your application below using Dewdrops' account. Then we'll be happy to take another look at your application! :)

- Eirwen Medraut

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Hello William!

Your application looks great and the added bits about the Time Warp looks excellent! However, I'm a little confused about his age still! You mention that you'd like him to be in Primary 1, which would mean he is 11. If that's the case his birth year would be 1927 post-warp (1965 pre-warp).

You also mention that the bullying by T.J. takes place just after he has turned 11, but at the same time you note that the incident was just before the Time Warp, so in December 1974 - That would make William turn 13 this year (1938), not 11.
However, if you would like him to be 11 this year, perhaps the incident wasn't about his birthday, but instead an argument about a Christmas party that couldn't be held when he was younger? :)

Please clarify this and we'll be happy to take another look at your application! :)

- Eirwen Medraut

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Archived Applications / Re: Amber Larson revised
« on: 25/04/2013 at 06:27 »
Hello Amber! :)

Thank you for taking the time to address the issues Ophelie pointed out. Before we can proceed with your application, there's just a few more things to address.

What Ophelie meant when she asked for a bit more detail in Amber's biography, was details about Amber as a person. It is nice to know when she started school and when she learned to talk, but what is she like as a person? Does she have any siblings? What's her relationship with her parents? Is she generally a happy person? Does she have many friends? What does she like to do in her free time? Things like that lets the reader know more about Amber's person and that makes reading about her much more interesting! :)

As for your roleplay response, what we were looking for was a response to this post:

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→ SAMPLE ROLEPLAY.
Please reply to the Sample Roleplay below.

What were partner projects about anyway?

Simon wasn't a loner, but he loathed any type of assignment that required him to team up with anyone. In his book, the only truly trustworthy student was himself. So naturally, when he'd been instructed to team of with a classmate and turn in a research report on the Muggle-American Civil War, Simon had been rather disappointed.

The library that afternoon was deserted aside from Simon and his partner. Before them lay a plethora of textbooks. Wars: Old and New by Kevin Torvalt. When You Say Civil... by Emma Jean. Each book was old and worn even more than the last. In a way, it was almost impressive that the books had lasted this long and still been put to such good use. Simon figured that there weren't many things for which that could be said.

Simon leafed through a copy of Understanding America by Harvey Wires, sighing heavily as each page flipped over on top of itself. He wondered what the student next to him was thinking. He was thinking that this was a drag. These books were probably boring beyond belief, despite their interesting appearance. The library was stuffy from the heat outside. Finally growing too bored from the text, Simon slammed the book shut and sat upright.

"How about I write the essay and stuff? You can just put your name on it. Sound good?"

Imagine you come across this post on the board, and write a reply to that. What will Amber do? How will she react? What does she think?

Also, please remember to add the detail about her bloodline (Muggleborn, Halfblood, Pureblood or Unknown) as well as picking Amber's magical strength and weakness, so we can put those details on her profile for you! :)

Please address those things and post your application below, and we'll be happy to look over your application again! :)

- Eirwen Medraut

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Elsewhere Accepted / Re: F. E. Reinhardt
« on: 24/04/2013 at 14:40 »
Hello Faye!

Your application looks good, there's just a few things I need you to adjust a bit before I can accept you.

In your roleplay response you mention that Faye grabs Dianne's arm and tugs her to another lady. That is actually powerplaying, and I will have to ask you to edit it a little bit, perhaps saying that Faye attempted to do those things, and thus giving Dianne a chance to react and perhaps even slip away from Faye before she is grabbed.

Your roleplay response also ends with Faye completely leaving the building and walking away. Please keep in mind that this could very well be a post you stumble across on the board. If this was the case, your reply would not leave much for Dianne to respond to at all, since Faye is gone. Could you please try and leave your reply a little more open?

Please post your application below with the changes, and we'll be happy to take another look at it! :)

- Eirwen Medraut

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Hi Stefan,

You application looks great!

Before we can accept it, though, there's just one thing I would like to ask of you. You write a lot about Stefan's parents in his biography and that is really good, but I'm curious about what Stefan is actually like? What does he think about what is happening between his parents? What is his relationship with them? And what does he feel about his mother disappearing so suddenly, and also about his father's very hard 'get over it'? Does he accept things easily, or is he sad or angry?

Please post a revised application below, and I'll be happy to take another look at it! :)

- Eirwen Medraut

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Archived Applications / Re: Sofie-Marie Bellastère
« on: 18/04/2013 at 23:43 »
Ahh, I understand what you mean! However, the way the Time Warp actually worked was that everyone in the wizarding community slid back in time.

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Time warp is actually less of a warp and more of a slide. The magical world will be sliding back in time, which means all the generations will also be going back in time. While we will find ourselves in 1937, the magical world that existed in 1937 will find themselves in 1899.

That means that whoever lived in 1937 pre-warp will now be living in 1899. And whoever now live in the 30s will all have come from the 70s.

I hope that makes it clearer for you. :)

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Archived Applications / Re: Sofie-Marie Bellastère
« on: 18/04/2013 at 22:57 »
Hello Miss Bellastère,

Your application is lovely! There's just one thing I was wondering about. Seeing as Sofie-Marie's family are muggles I'm curious to know how the time warp has affected her?

If you are looking for more information on what happened during the time warp and how some characters reacted to having their muggle relations disappear, this guide might be helpful: A Quick Quide to Time Warp

Please post your application in this thread with the additional information, and we'll be happy to look over your application once more! :)

Also feel free to ask any admin or GMod any questions you might have, at any time. :)

- Eirwen Medraut
 

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Archived Applications / Re: Vera Cohen
« on: 05/04/2013 at 22:13 »

Miss Cohen,

Congratulations, your application to Salem Institute has been accepted. Term begins 01 May, 2013. Currently, students have gathered at Camp Loki. Your admission is joint for both the school and Camp Loki, and we encourage you to spend your summer there. Should you choose, you may also visit our Elsewhere board via the Floo Network to visit or purchase school supplies. We look forward to seeing you at the School.


Regards,
Eirwen Medraut,
Secretaire des Admissions & Conseiller
Beauxbatons Academy

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Archived Applications / Re: Zoe Dalton
« on: 05/04/2013 at 22:01 »
Hello Zoe,

Your application looks good. :) However, before I can move to accept it, please be advised that you will need to have your account with your characters full name - Zoe Dalton. 

You can post a Helpdesk ticket requesting to have your name changed here: Helpdesk

Please address this and I'll be happy to have another look at your application. :)

- Eirwen Medraut

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Archived Applications / Re: Vera Cohen
« on: 05/04/2013 at 12:59 »
Hello Vera,

Your application is lovely! There's just one thing I was wondering about. Seeing as Vera's father is a muggle I'm curious to know how the time warp has affected her family?

If you are looking for more information on what happened during the time warp and how some characters reacted to having their muggle relations disappear, this guide might be helpful: A Quice Quide to Time Warp

Also feel free to ask any admin or GMod any questions you might have, at any time. :)

- Eirwen Medraut
 

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Archived Applications / Re: Jasper McCloud
« on: 03/04/2013 at 21:33 »
Mr McCloud,

Congratulations, your application to Hogwarts School has been accepted. Term begins 01 May, 2013. Currently, students have gathered at Camp Loki. Your admission is joint for both the school and Camp Loki, and we encourage you to spend your summer there. Should you choose, you may also visit our Elsewhere board via the Floo Network to visit or purchase school supplies. We look forward to seeing you at the School.


Regards,
Eirwen Medraut,
Secretaire des Admissions & Conseiller
Beauxbatons Academy

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Archived Applications / Re: Tyson Empire
« on: 03/04/2013 at 19:30 »

Mr Empire,

Congratulations, your application to Salem Institute has been accepted. Term begins 01 May, 2013. Currently, students have gathered at Camp Loki. Your admission is joint for both the school and Camp Loki, and we encourage you to spend your summer there. Should you choose, you may also visit our Elsewhere board via the Floo Network to visit or purchase school supplies. We look forward to seeing you at the School.


Regards,
Eirwen Medraut,
Secretaire des Admissions & Conseiller
Beauxbatons Academy

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Archived Applications / Re: Alice Cantrell
« on: 03/04/2013 at 09:44 »
Miss Cantrell,

Congratulations, your application to Hogwarts School has been accepted. Term begins 01 May, 2013. Currently, students have gathered at Camp Loki. Your admission is joint for both the school and Camp Loki, and we encourage you to spend your summer there. Should you choose, you may also visit our Elsewhere board via the Floo Network to visit or purchase school supplies. We look forward to seeing you at the School.


Regards,
Eirwen Medraut,
Secretaire des Admissions & Conseiller
Beauxbatons Academy

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Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Bo Madigan
« on: 08/03/2013 at 04:29 »
Accepted!

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