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Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Emma Jones
« on: 23/06/2019 at 02:46 »
Hello, Lilith!

Your revisions are coming along well, there are just a couple more things before we can accept your app!

Your biography is your chance to describe how Lilith's history has been up until this point and how Lilith has felt about it! You've touched on a lot of events that have happened, but think about how Lilith felt during them as well and how those events helped shape who she is today!

As well, your RP sample needs a few tweaks. While you are now actively responding to the prompt, you have made it sound as if Lilith does not know Janey personally - which would also mean she shouldn't know Janey's name yet! And, though this is just a prompt, we do want you to treat it like a real post you would find on the boards, meaning that to have Lilith leave the park does not give "Janey" anything to reply to!

When re-writing your RP sample, try to picture the world from Lilith's point of view, as you reflected on how she thought about Janey being harsh. How does Lilith respond to Janey saying "...Do you want to play?" to her? Does she want to participate in the same games? How does she feel about someone unknown approaching her?

Keep in mind the RP sample is meant to be responded to, so keep your ending open to offer something for the other writer!

Once you've completed these changes, please post your entire revised applications below and we'll take another look! If you have any questions, feel free to reach out to any of the administrators or me!

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Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Rosemary Wolffe || child
« on: 23/06/2019 at 02:36 »
Accepted!

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Adults & Children / ACCEPTED: Johnny Kazama
« on: 23/06/2019 at 02:33 »

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Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Johnny Kazama
« on: 23/06/2019 at 02:31 »
Accepted!

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Accepted!

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Accepted!

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This app has been accepted!
http://hogwarts-school.net/sortinghat/index.php?topic=8634.0

Note: We have both Salem and Ilvernmorny here, so you're welcome to choose whichever one you'd rather he attended!

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Accepted!

Note: We have both Salem and Ilvernmorny here, so you're welcome to choose whichever one you'd rather he attended!

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Accepted!

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Suggestions & Questions / Re: Typos!
« on: 30/04/2019 at 15:53 »
Edited!

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Accepted!

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Archived Applications / Re: Kaguya Märchen
« on: 23/04/2019 at 02:53 »
Dear Miss Märchen,

We are pleased to inform you that you have been accepted to Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry.

Term begins on 1 May. Currently, students have gathered at Camp Loki, and we encourage you to spend your summer there. Should you choose, you may also visit our Elsewhere board via the Floo Network to visit or purchase school supplies.


Yours sincerely,

Deputy Headmistress

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Dear Mr. Märchen,

We are pleased to inform you that you have been accepted to Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry.

Term begins on 1 May. Currently, students have gathered at Camp Loki, and we encourage you to spend your summer there. Should you choose, you may also visit our Elsewhere board via the Floo Network to visit or purchase school supplies.


Yours sincerely,

Deputy Headmistress

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Archived Applications / Re: Vanya Volkov
« on: 23/04/2019 at 02:47 »
Hello, Vanya --

Welcome to the site! Your application is looking great, I just wanted to clarify a couple of things. In your bio you wrote:

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It took them years to reach any sort of understanding, and even now, their relationship is a...unique one, comprised mostly of Vanya making snarky jabs and Evgenia scolding her. Still, though, they do love each other deep down, and Devora has been trying for a long time to find an institute that could help Vanya hone her unusual abilities. Up until Vanya's preteen years, Evgenia was just homeschooling her, and, being a muggle herself, she couldn't cater to everything that Vanya needed.

It was by pure, miraculous chance that Evgenia happened to find herself involved with a wizard. The traveler, Stanford Windmire, grew close to Evgenia through a year of courtship, and as soon as she confided in him what Vanya could do, he knew that she was a witch. It was only due to his advice that Evgenia moved with Vanya to England, where they currently live, and with his aid, they enrolled Vanya as a fourth year incoming student.

In this portion, did you mean Devora the aunt, or her mother Evgenia? I was just a bit confused since in your RP sample you mentioned 'her aunt's boyfriend' which made me think you meant Devora in this portion. If you could clarify this and repost your Biography portion below (no need to repost your entire application), I can review it again!

If you have any questions, feel free to message me! Thanks!

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Archived Applications / Re: francis james dufort
« on: 16/04/2019 at 16:48 »
Dear Mr Dufort,

We are pleased to inform you that you have been accepted to Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry.

Term begins 1 September. Currently, students have gathered at Camp Loki, and we encourage you to spend your summer there. Should you choose, you may also visit our Elsewhere board via the Floo Network to visit or purchase school supplies.


Yours sincerely,

Deputy Headmistress

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