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Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Theodora [Teddy] Wyndham
« on: 07/05/2016 at 14:13 »
Hey Theodora! Your application is simply lovely—I love how much thought you've put into Teddy's background and the form of her biography—but there's just one tiny thing I'd like to ask you to change before we can accept the application. It seems there's a bit of a mistake in your graduating year. Since it's 1947 now and Teddy's 24, graduating in 1944 would've meant that she was about 21, not 17/8. If you could just tweak that and repost your application below for clarity, that would be super! :)

Thank you. <3

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Accepted, dear! <3

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Archived Applications / Re: Satoshi Tsukiko
« on: 30/04/2016 at 16:03 »
Hello Satoshi, and welcome to the site! :D Your application is coming along very nicely so far, but before we can accept it, there are just a few things to clarify.

First of all, on our site we use our characters' full names as our usernames, so if you'll need to ask for a small username change (Satoshi to Satoshi Tsukiko) by submitting a helpdesk ticket here.

Second, there seems to be a bit of a mistake with Satoshi's birthdate—I believe you meant 1936 or 1935.

Lastly, in your roleplay sample, you have Satoshi leave the scene. If this were a real roleplay, that wouldn't leave your roleplay partner with much to reply to and would end things rather abruptly, so if you could just edit your roleplay sample so that Satoshi sticks around (however much he doesn't want to) and interacts with Hugh, that'd be super! 

Once you've posted the entire edited application below, we can take another look and get you going. ^_^

Thank you! <3

—'ries

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Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Liam Cimorelli||Elsewhere Adult||
« on: 30/04/2016 at 07:44 »
Accepted, lovely! <3

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Hi, Aria, and welcome to the site! :) Your application is coming along really nicely so far, but before we can accept it, there are just a few things in your application to address.

First of all, on site we use our character's first name and last name for usernames. That being the case, we'll need to have you change your username to your character's name. You can do this by submitting a helpdesk ticket here and asking for the change.

Secondly, you mention a 'prediction ability', which I take to mean something along the lines of Seer abilities. On our site, such abilities would fall into the category of we consider a Special Ability, which would require submitting a Special Request to the administrators. If you feel this ability is absolutely essential to Aria's character, then you'll need to submit a Special Request and wait for it to be processed. For now, though, please edit out all mentions of the prediction ability from her application.

Thirdly, you say that Aria is from Italy, so I'm quite curious as to how she would get to Hogwarts—could you please elaborate on her background? As you don't mention any move to the UK and seem to imply that she was raised in Italy, it's far more likely that she would receive one from the Italian school of magic than one from Hogwarts, which is in a completely different country. Did her family move to the UK at some point, perhaps?

Fourthly, in your RP sample, you say that Aria is in Hufflepuff. While your preferences for a House will certainly be taken into consideration by the administrators, there is no guarantee that your character will be placed there, so I have to ask that you edit this out.

In your RP sample you also have Aria leave the scene. If this were a real role-play, that would make for an abrupt ending and not give your partner, Evangeline, much to reply to, so if you could just edit the role-play sample so that Aria stays around and interacts with Evangeline, that’d be super! :)

Lastly, you say that Aria was adopted by Muggles, so there’s just one thing I want to make sure you know. On HS-net there was a major site plot called the Time Warp, which effectively threw Wizarding Britain back into the 30's and caused all wizards' Muggle relatives to disappear. If Aria, being 11-12, was adopted any earlier than about 1-2 years old, her Muggle adopted family would’ve disappeared—so she would've had to be adopted at around 1-2 in order for your story to remain intact. This is just something to keep in mind, of course. :)

Once you've made the changes, please post your entire edited application below and we can give it another look. ^_^

Thank you! <3

—'ries

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Archived Applications / Re: Darius Palomer
« on: 23/04/2016 at 17:32 »


Dear Mr. Palomer,

We are delighted to inform you that your application to Hogwarts School of Witchcraft & Wizardry has been accepted. Term will begin on May 1st, 2016. Currently, students have gathered at Camp Loki; your admission is joint for both the school and Camp Loki, and we cordially invite you to spend your summer there if you so wish. Should you choose, you may also visit our Elsewhere board via the Floo Network to purchase school supplies.

We look forward to seeing you at the School.


Regards,

Aries Paladin
Resistance Leader

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Archived Applications / Re: Margaret Harkiss
« on: 23/04/2016 at 14:19 »


Dear Miss Harkiss,

We are delighted to inform you that your application to Hogwarts School of Witchcraft & Wizardry has been accepted. Term will begin on May 1st, 2016. Currently, students have gathered at Camp Loki; your admission is joint for both the school and Camp Loki, and we cordially invite you to spend your summer there if you so wish. Should you choose, you may also visit our Elsewhere board via the Floo Network to purchase school supplies.

We look forward to seeing you at the School.


Regards,

Aries Paladin
Resistance Leader

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Archived Applications / Re: Application: Leona Hesse
« on: 23/04/2016 at 08:20 »


Dear Miss Hesse,

We are delighted to inform you that your application to Hogwarts School of Witchcraft & Wizardry has been accepted. Term will begin on May 1st, 2016. Currently, students have gathered at Camp Loki; your admission is joint for both the school and Camp Loki, and we cordially invite you to spend your summer there if you so wish. Should you choose, you may also visit our Elsewhere board via the Floo Network to purchase school supplies.

We look forward to seeing you at the School.


Regards,

Aries Paladin
Resistance Leader

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Hey Preston, and welcome to the site! :D Your application is shaping up really nicely so far, but before we can accept it, there are just a few clarifications we’d like to make.

Firstly, on HS-net there was a major site plot called the Time Warp, which effectively threw Wizarding Britain back into the 30's and caused all wizards' Muggle relatives to disappear. Naturally, this would affect Preston’s background quite considerably, making him motherless and sisterless. This being the case, we’ll need to ask you to either edit your application to reflect the Time Warp’s effects on his family, or to make his mother and sister witches (Muggleborn for his mother, and halfblood for his sister, perhaps?); either of these options would allow for consistency with our site plot.

Secondly, you say that Preston was born in Italy and raised there. If the family is from Italy, then it would likely be the Italian school of magic which contacts them, and not Hogwarts. Did they move at some point to the UK, which would make Preston eligible for attending Hogwarts? Were both of his parents Italian? His name and surname seem to indicate some British lineage—perhaps his father was from the UK? If you could clarify Preston’s lineage and present home, that’d be just super! :)

Lastly, for usernames on this site, we use our characters' first names and last names. Please change your username by submitting a helpdesk ticket here.

Once you've edited Preston's biography, please repost the entire application below and we'll give it another look. :)

Thank you! <3

—'ries

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Archived Applications / Re: Margaret Harkiss
« on: 23/04/2016 at 06:01 »
Hey Margaret, and welcome to the site! :D Your application is just stunning (I love how much thought went into it!), but before we can accept it, there's just one change I'd like to ask that you make. Years, as with Houses, are not necessarily guaranteed (though the administrators will definitely try to give you your first choice), so if you could just tweak the application and make her present Year a little more vague, that would be great! (Later, your biography will be posted up in your House, so saying she's Sixth may make things a little confusing if Maggie ends up Fifth and not Sixth.)

Once you've made the changes, please post the entire edited application below so that we can take another look and get you sorted. :)

Thank you! <3

—'ries

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Archived Applications / Re: Amber
« on: 23/04/2016 at 05:40 »
Hi Amber, and welcome to the site! :D Your application is looking lovely so far, but before we can accept it, there are just a few things to clarify.

First of all, on our site, we do not allow the use of names that belong to celebrities or characters from other series; similarly, we do not allow roleplay of celebrities or characters from other series. We also use our character's first name and last name for usernames. That being the case, we'll have to ask that you change Amber Liu's name into one that's more original, and also ask for a username change. You can change your username by submitting a helpdesk ticket here.

Once you get your username changed, please edit out all mentions of 'Amber Liu' from your application.

Secondly, I'm a little curious as to why Amber wanted to go to Hogwarts specifically. What drew her to Hogwarts? For instance, did anyone she know attend the school and praise it in front of her? If you could expound on her reason for wanting to attend Hogwarts, that'd be great! The more we know about her story, the better. :)

Thirdly, I'm also curious about Amber's crossdressing and its effect on her life. As you know, the era we are in was much more conservative than our present era, even in the more tolerant USA. Did Amber experience anything negative as a result of her crossdressing? I imagine that more than a few people would’ve looked past her wonderful personality and only seen her for her unconventional appearance. If you could talk about this a little more, that would also be lovely!

Once you have made these changes, please post the entire revised application below so we can take another look at it. :)

Thank you! <3

—'ries

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Archived Applications / Re: Application: Antonín Borovsky
« on: 17/04/2016 at 16:05 »


Dear Mr. Borovsky,

We are delighted to inform you that your application to Hogwarts School of Witchcraft & Wizardry has been accepted. Term will begin on May 1st, 2016. Currently, students have gathered at Camp Loki; your admission is joint for both the school and Camp Loki, and we cordially invite you to spend your summer there if you so wish. Should you choose, you may also visit our Elsewhere board via the Floo Network to purchase school supplies.

We look forward to seeing you at the School.


Regards,

Aries Paladin
Resistance Leader

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Archived Applications / Re: Application: Olivia Allen
« on: 17/04/2016 at 12:45 »
Hey, Olivia, and welcome to the site! :D Your application is looking great (I particularly love how much personality Olivia has!), but before we can accept it there are just a few details to clarify.

Firstly, on HS-net there was a major site plot called the Time Warp, which effectively threw Wizarding Britain back into the 30's and caused all wizards' Muggle relatives to disappear. As Muggleborn Olivia was born in '1930' and the year warped back to was 1938, this unfortunately would mean that she was orphaned around the age of seven or eight. This being the case, we’ll need to ask that you alter your biography so it's consistent with site plot.

Secondly, while your House preferences will definitely be taken into account by the administrators during the Sorting process, there is no guarantee that your character will be in any particular House, so please remove the mention of Ravenclaw from her biography.

Lastly, while your role-play sample is really lovely, we’d like you to respond to one of the prompts included in the application; if you could just reply to either the prompt with Evangeline in the dungeons or the prompt with Hugh in the gardens, that’d be super! :)

Once you’ve made these changes, please post the entire edited application below and we can take another look. ^_^

Thank you! <3

—ries

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Okay, Transfiguration for weakness it is! And thank you for doing the spell-check—that reads much better! ^_^ <3





Dear Mr. Mandrake,

We are delighted to inform you that your application to Hogwarts School of Witchcraft & Wizardry has been accepted. Term will begin on May 1st, 2016. Currently, students have gathered at Camp Loki; your admission is joint for both the school and Camp Loki, and we cordially invite you to spend your summer there if you so wish. Should you choose, you may also visit our Elsewhere board via the Floo Network to purchase school supplies.

We look forward to seeing you at the School.


Regards,

Aries Paladin
Resistance Leader

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Archived Applications / Re: Connor Davies - Application
« on: 16/04/2016 at 09:24 »


Dear Mr. Davies,

We are delighted to inform you that your application to Hogwarts School of Witchcraft & Wizardry has been accepted. Term will begin on May 1st, 2016. Currently, students have gathered at Camp Loki; your admission is joint for both the school and Camp Loki, and we cordially invite you to spend your summer there if you so wish. Should you choose, you may also visit our Elsewhere board via the Floo Network to purchase school supplies.

We look forward to seeing you at the School.


Regards,

Aries Paladin
Resistance Leader

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Archived Applications / Re: Skylar Addington - Application
« on: 16/04/2016 at 09:21 »
Accepted, lovely! <3

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Hey, John, and welcome to the site! :D Your application is lovely (I really love the thought that went into John's biography—it's so colorful!), but there's just one thing I'd like to ask you to do before we can continue processing it.

Please read your application through one more time, as there are more than a few spelling mistakes. It's a great application, but the frequency of errors makes it very difficult to read. If you could just put the application through a word processor (which should highlight the errors and let you fix them) or use the spelling check function on our site (it's one button away from the 'Post' button when you're making a new post), that'd be just super! :)

Once you've done this, please post the entire edited application below so that we can give it another look.

Thank you! <3

—'ries

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Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Finlay McCormick|Adult|Elsewhere
« on: 16/04/2016 at 08:52 »
Accepted, darling! <3

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Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Ivan Pavlova|Adult|Elsewhere
« on: 16/04/2016 at 08:43 »
Accepted, darling! <3

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Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Apollo Narkissos King
« on: 16/04/2016 at 08:35 »
Accepted, lovely! <3

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