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Congratulations! This application has been accepted.

http://hogwarts-school.net/sortinghat/index.php?topic=7986.0

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Elsewhere Accepted / Re: F.F. Morrissey || Elsewhere Teen
« on: 20/01/2018 at 14:32 »
Accepted, Flynn Flanagan Morrissey!

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Elsewhere Accepted / Re: F.F. Morrissey || Elsewhere Teen
« on: 20/01/2018 at 12:27 »
Hey, Flynn Flanagan Morrissey!

Your application looks great, there's just one thing we'll need you to tweak before we can get you accepted. In your RP sample, you imply that Godric Park is in Godric's Hollow/the city. Our Godric Park is actually in Hogsmeade, a village in Scotland, whereas Godric's Hollow is another separate village in England. If you could edit your RP sample to reflect this a little more clearly, that would be great.

Also, in your bio, you note that Flynn is a fourth year Gryffindor. While this is fine and you don't need to edit it, please be aware that if you ever decide to bring Flynn to the castle, we cannot guarantee either his house or the year that you will have been playing him in.

Once you've made the required change, please repost your entire revised application below, and we'll be more than happy to take another look. Thanks!

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Adults & Children / ACCEPTED: Tia Archer
« on: 20/01/2018 at 12:08 »
Congratulations! This application has been accepted.

http://hogwarts-school.net/sortinghat/index.php?topic=7984.0

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Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Tia Archer
« on: 20/01/2018 at 12:07 »
Accepted!

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Adults & Children / ARCHIVED: Tiana Archer
« on: 20/01/2018 at 12:03 »

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Archived Applications / Re: Tiana Archer
« on: 20/01/2018 at 12:01 »
Archiving!

(Application reposted here.)

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Congratulations! This application has been accepted.

http://hogwarts-school.net/sortinghat/index.php?topic=7981.0

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Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Noah Arcilla -- Elsewhere Teen
« on: 20/01/2018 at 11:56 »
Accepted!

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Congratulations! This application has been accepted.

http://hogwarts-school.net/sortinghat/index.php?topic=7976.0

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Accepted!

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Hey, Romenos!

Your app looks great, there's just one thing we'll need you to edit before we can get you accepted.

Seeing as Romenos had already been apped/played at the castle in previous terms, he isn't eligible for the 32 automatic Elsewhere Adult levels -- you'll need to use our Castle Dropouts system instead. Seeing as he never claimed his levels for 5th year, you can add 6 levels (2 levels per missed levels request) to your current levels, which are: C6D4T5S5.

If you could let me know below what you'd like your levels to be (no need to repost your whole app), we can get you accepted ASAP. If you've got any questions about Castle Dropout levels, feel free to me PM me. Thanks!

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Hi Aoife!

Seeing as you already applied with Aoife and played her as a first year during the 1944-45 term, you won't be able to reapply as a first year again. This is primarily because by doing so, you would alter the histories of other characters who might have interacted with Aoife previously (e.g. housemates, classmates, professors, etc.)

Given that Aoife would have graduated in the 1950-51 term, you won't be able to apply with her as a Hogwarts student again. However, you can always apply as an Elsewhere adult with her or make a new character with a different name instead. Seeing as your application/biography is different to your initial application in 2015, you are more than welcome to simply tweak this application to fit a new character, if you do decide to go down that route.

If you could let us know below whether you'd like the application to be archived straight away, or whether you'd like to repost it under a different character, that would be great. If you have any questions, please feel free to contact myself or another administrator. Thanks!

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Hogwarts School Accepted / Re: Esther May
« on: 27/12/2017 at 23:15 »
Hi Esther, welcome to the site!

Your application looks great, there's just one tiny thing I'd like you to edit before we can get you accepted.

In your RP sample, you have Esther already walk away from the encounter before Evangeline is given a chance to respond. If this were a real thread, Evangeline wouldn't have much to respond with, given that Esther has already ended the interaction with her. If you could rephrase your final phrase ('Esther shrugged and continued walking.') into something more open-ended (e.g. she might pause for a brief moment to wait for a response, or she might consider walking away, or she might even take a step forward to continue walking), that would give Evangeline a chance to reply or even try to stop Esther from leaving before she's too far away.

Once you have made the required change, please repost your entire revised application below, and we'll be more than happy to take another look. Thanks!

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Student Applications / Re: William McAllister
« on: 27/12/2017 at 23:07 »
Hi William, welcome to the site!

Your application is coming along nicely, there's just a couple of things that you'll need to edit for us before we can get you accepted.

Firstly, you mention 'the dark lord' and 'Yaxley' at the beginning of your biography. In our universe, none of the events that occurred in the books between Harry and Voldemort have ever happened, and nor do most of these characters (including Yaxley) exist. It's fine for you to say that Phyllis and Quentin are Aurors, and that Phyllis died in a duel with a dark wizard, but you'll need to remove any references to Voldemort, Yaxley, or any part of the original Harry Potter plotline from your application.

For the same reason, you'll need to remove the reference to Alice quitting her job at the Quibbler, as the Lovegoods don't exist in our universe. You can always say that she worked at the Daily Prophet (an established paper in our universe) or invent another company instead.

Please also note that while it's fine for members of William's family to be what we consider 'special' characters e.g. a (rumoured) werewolf or an animagus, they would still need to submit a special request if you ever chose to play them/have someone else play them. It is not necessarily guaranteed that this request will be granted. You don't need to edit this, but it's something to bear in mind!

Finally, your RP sample will need a little more work. I see that you've responded to Evangeline's post in sections, rather than posting your response as one complete post. When we post here, we take turns posting. Evangeline would post her entire post, then you would post your response in a new reply, then she would post hers, and so on. It's much less confusing for the reader if you leave Evangeline's post as one whole post, and then write yours as one whole post in response, instead of in small sections between Evangeline's.

Here, we also RP in the past tense; you're currently writing in the present, so you'll need to edit this accordingly (e.g. 'William said/William did' rather than 'William says/William does').

Your response might also be considered powerplaying by some players. In your response, William seems to be responding to every thought that Evangeline has -- but of course, he couldn't possibly know everything that she's thinking! He can certainly assume, but chances are that he won't always be right. Instead of trying to respond exactly to everything that Evangeline has written, try instead to think about your own character. For example, why is William in the dungeon? Is he lost, or has he just had Potions class? Does he hear Evangeline before he sees her? Is he frightened when he hears her calling? If you focus on your own character and their thoughts, decisions, and actions, powerplay becomes much less likely.

If you'd like to look at some examples of how we typically respond to other players' posts here, please take a look at the sample applications and the roleplay responses there. They can be very useful in establishing a guide to our general style of RP, so you should aim to follow a similar way of writing (i.e. in one post, past tense, concentrating on your own character).

Once you've made the required changes, please repost your entire revised application below, and we'll be more than happy to take another look. If you need some help with your application or have any questions, please feel free to message myself or another administrator. Thanks!

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Hogwarts School Accepted / Re: Jane Fitzwalter
« on: 24/12/2017 at 00:06 »
Hi Jane, welcome to the site!

There's a couple of things we'll need you to edit before we can get you accepted.

In your biography, you state that Jane's mother "was on her way to make a name for herself and provide her family with the status and coin that was expected of them by becoming the head doctor at St. Mungos". I just wanted to clarify whether you meant that she was a head doctor at St. Mungo's, or that she was trying to become one? If she's just trying to become one, could you make that a little more clear? If you meant that she was a head doctor, you'll need to remove this part from your bio. We already have played heads of departments at St. Mungo's, so it wouldn't be fair to them for Jane's mother to have claimed the role. Furthermore, you mention that a woman being a head doctor at Mungo's was "a feat previously never achieved by a woman of her time" -- however, one of our current department heads is actually a woman, so you'll need to remove this part from your bio.

You also mention that Jane wears her hair bright blue at Hogwarts. This would likely not be tolerated by the Hogwarts staff as an acceptable/appropriate hair colour. If you could alter this slightly to reflect that (e.g. she often gets in trouble with staff because she colours her hair blue), that would be great. It's unlikely that she would be able to keep her hair that shade for long periods of time at the castle without consequences.

In your RP response, you seem to imply that Jane is a Slytherin. While this is totally fine for the purposes of the sample and you don't need to change that, just bear in mind that we cannot guarantee that you will get your house request.

We also use our character names as our usernames here. If you submit a helpdesk ticket here requesting that your name be changed to Jane Fitzwalter, an admin will be able to change that for you.

Once you have made the required changes, please repost your entire revised application below, and we'll be more than happy to take another look. Thanks!

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Hogwarts School Accepted / Re: Benedict T. Abercombie
« on: 18/12/2017 at 22:30 »
Hi Ben, welcome to the site!

Your application looks good so far, there's just one tiny thing we'll need you to change before we can get you accepted.

In your RP sample, you mention that Ben is carrying his Nimbus broomstick. According to the HP wiki, the Nimbus company wasn't formed until 1967. Currently, the year on our site is 1952, which means Nimbuses don't exist yet. If you could just edit out the reference to the Nimbus, that would great.

I also noticed that in your RP sample and Personality section, Ben is written as a Slytherin. Please note that while we try to give everybody their first choice of house, this is not always possible. You don't need to edit out your references to his assumed house in your application, but I just wanted you to be aware that we can't guarantee he will be Sorted into Slytherin.

Once you've made the required change, please repost your entire revised application below, and we'll be more than happy to take another look. Thanks!

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Student Applications / Re: Jason Calloway
« on: 17/12/2017 at 00:16 »
Hi Jason, and welcome to the site!

Your application's looking good so far, there's just a couple of things we'll need you to edit before we can get you accepted.

Firstly, you mention that Jason got sorted into Gryffindor. While we do try to take house choice into account when sorting new characters, there is no guarantee that we can grant your request, so you'll need to remove all references to Jason being in Gryffindor from your bio just in case. On a similar note, you mention that he plays Chaser on the Gryffindor team. In the interests of keeping things fair for our players who have already played Chaser in previous years, please remove this reference to the specific position (instead, you could keep things vague and say that he plays on his house team).

Secondly, you also powerplay Hugh and his rat a little in your RP sample:

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The boy who had tried to seem haughty just a few moments ago now stood there with a blank face, not saying anything at all.

 Jason took the silence for a ‘yes,’

Here, you're not giving Hugh a chance to answer/assuming he doesn't answer -- if Hugh were a real character, he'd probably want the chance to choose how to respond to Jason. You also write that Jason manages to catch the rat. Seeing as the rat is Hugh's, it's possible that he might not want someone else grabbing his pet, so it'd be best to avoid saying that the spell succeeded. You can definitely say that Jason attempted to summon/levitate it. If you could edit your RP sample to eliminate any potential powerplaying, that would be great.

(On another note, our magical rules are slightly different to the HP canon. 'Accio' would fall under our Conjuring/Summoning rules, and is something that younger students would be able to cast as early as their 1st year -- although obviously not as well as an older student could.)

Once you've made the required changes, please repost your entire revised application below, and we'll be more than happy to take another look. Thanks!

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Student Applications / Re: Lou Undine
« on: 16/12/2017 at 23:42 »
Hi Lou, and welcome to the site!

Your application's coming along nicely, there's just a couple of things we'll need you to edit before we can get you accepted.

Firstly, you mention Lou applying to Hogwarts. Generally, students don't need to apply to Hogwarts, as the acceptance letter is sent automatically to all eligible students. If you could remove the references to Lou/her father applying to Hogwarts, that would be great.

Secondly, in the description of your appearance, you mention that "she would use charms to help her eyesight everyday". I wasn't sure whether you meant that Lou herself would cast charms to improve her eyesight? If so, that seems like extremely advanced magic for an 11 or 12 year old, and so would probably be impossible for Lou to achieve. Please could you edit that part of the description to account for our magical rules and limitations.

Once you have made the required changes, please repost your entire revised application below, and we'll be more than happy to take another look. Thanks!

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Congratulations! This shop has been approved.

http://hogwarts-school.net/sortinghat/index.php?topic=7868.0

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