Hey Lance!
Your application looks pretty good, but there are a couple things I'd like you to look over and alter before we can continue your application process.
1. Invisibility cloaks are extremely rare, and very valuable-- in the canon world, there is only one true cloak of invisibility, and it was passed down through a reputable pureblood family. Where did Lance get it? Why does he have one?
2. If Lance's mother works in Gringotts, it will mean that she has a pretty lengthy commute to work, as Gringotts is in London. I don't think that we have an American counterpart at this time in our canon. Perhaps tweak her occupation a little bit? If you choose not to, please expand your biography to include how Lance might feel about his mother commuting to London on a regular basis.
3. Your roleplay is very creative, and we value creativity very much! However, there was a set prompt which accompanied the application to be completed with it:
You come across this post on the site. Please as your character. Remember, you can only roleplay your own character's actions!
What were partner projects about anyway?
Simon wasn't a loner, but he loathed any type of assignment that required him to team up with anyone. In his book, the only truly trustworthy student was himself. So naturally, when he'd been instructed to team of with a classmate and turn in a research report on the Muggle-American Civil War, Simon had been rather disappointed.
The library that afternoon was deserted aside from Simon and his partner. Before them lay a plethora of textbooks. Wars: Old and New by Kevin Torvalt. When You Say Civil... by Emma Jean. Each book was old and worn even more than the last. In a way, it was almost impressive that the books had lasted this long and still been put to such good use. Simon figured that there weren't many things for which that could be said.
Simon leafed through a copy of Understanding America by Harvey Wires, sighing heavily as each page flipped over on top of itself. He wondered what the student next to him was thinking. He was thinking that this was a drag. These books were probably boring beyond belief, despite their interesting appearance. The library was stuffy from the heat outside. Finally growing too bored from the text, Simon slammed the book shut and sat upright.
"How about I write the essay and stuff? You can just put your name on it. Sound good?"
Please revise your roleplay response with a reply to the given prompt.
Thank you for your patience and your cooperation!
- Raffy
