Hello Alexander!
Your application looks fantastic, and I can’t wait to see Alex in action. There are only a few details I’d like you to address before we accept your application!
First, for your levels, we ask that there is a relatively even distribution across the four categories. Of course, characters are welcome to have their strengths, but your lowest ability should be half of the highest. (For example, if you’d like Transfiguration to be as high as 10, Divination would need to be at least 5.
Second, I see that your biography is written entirely in first person. I love it as much as the next writer, and I know your roleplay response is in the third person. This is just a friendly reminder that roleplays should always be in third person. (I’m just making sure!)
Third, while Alex has had some awesome adventures and a very fascinating life, there are some things that may need a special request approval from our Admin team. Some of the aspects of Alex’s history seem, while very exciting, a little unrealistic for our site. For several years, from 1937 until late 1941, the Ministry had set a lockdown, and people were not allowed in or out of the country, so for some of Alex’s trips, he most likely would have been unable to get into the UK. Also, hiring an ex-Germany Spy in the Ministry seems like a stretch for us, and you may need to have a Special Request approved for how you plan to follow through with that plot.
You are more than welcomed to remove this from his history, and leave it so he was arrested and later released before coming to London after 1941, to avoid needing to fill out the Special Request. Let me know what you decide!
Very last thing, and I know it’s a lot so I apologize, but I’d rather tell you it all now than later. Very small detail, but for your roleplay response, if this was a real rp, you’ve made it very difficult for Joshua to respond, since Alexander walked away. Instead, you can have Alexander turning to leave, but still leave it open for Joshua to make a proper response.
Thanks very much for making the changes, and I hope we can get you playing soon! Any questions, please feel free to PM me!
Charlie