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Archived Applications / Re: Student Application Request: Desmond Wright
« on: 19/04/2016 at 13:43 »
Mr. Hawksworth,
Thank you for your kind reply and request, and please let my apologize for the bad RP mistake that I made. I was on a conference call at the time and also trying to type up that quickly after reading it since I figured I would have no time after the call lol! I have always loved the name Emma, so the name just stuck out in my mind. lol
Below, I have provided the "correct" RP response and also an expansion of the Bio of Desmond. With the bio, I didn't expand too much on his history because I was worried of providing too much to read, so I paired it down. Also, for the RP, I simple just replaced Emma with the correct name of Evangeline and expanded only slightly. I figured, this would be easier than taking control of Evangelina who could correct Des on his misunderstand of what Evangeline was and why she was looking for a GHOST named Emma, which would likely pull Desmond in, since he has never seen a ghost before!
Corrected RP Response:
Option 1:
Coming around the corner after being startled by a booming voice from a girl who was shouting the requested presence of Ms. Emma Birch. Desmond, red in the face, inched from the shadows and bowed heavily, “Please excuse me, miss; my name is Desmond Wright, an’ I was walking the halls down here. My deepest sorry for startling you, if I had... I was simply exploring the grounds, and dark frightful areas sometimes hold the most interesting secrets. I have also found, that when I am scared – I sometimes am able to be more aware of the interesting things around! Kind of funny, but I learn more when scared.” Trying to be polite, he chuckled into the air and rolled his shoulders. Placing his hands into the air, he showed her that he was holding nothing of any danger to her; just a blank paged journal and pencil. “This was a gift from a good friend of mine, Mr. Charles McCloud, owner of the ‘Letters and Books’ bookstore in Dublin eastside.”
Starring at the ground and with curled shoulders, he waited for Evangeline to respond. Hoping she would not find him strange, he yearned to share the many things he had found so far while exploring the wide open grounds of Hogwarts School; all written or drawn down, of course.
Further Expansion on Bio:
Desmond’s father’s name is James Wright, and is of Pure Blood lineage while the Mother is of Muggle born with no natural magic skills of her own. The couple came together by the persistent courting of James who spoke words of love, care, and hope into Esther’s ears and heart. Being that Esther never new a life of income security or popular status in the community, she was pulled along easily by James. With his romantic promises so alluring, she fell straight into the fantasy that such a handsome and well-dressed man would take care of her and their family for the rest of their lives. Sadly, soon after showing, James was struck with panic at having to have actual responsibility and fled from their lives with no notice. While heart broken, Esther knew that their child still needed to be cared and loved, so she stuck to her responsibility of being a loving mother to her child and teach him how to never run from responsibility; especially when he too was to become a father.
James Wright is the second child of the Mystical Wright Family of Dublin, a heritage that was given incentive to move from their historical roots of England for Ireland fifty years prior. The mother’s name is Catherine Wright and the father is Wilson Wright. The family’s other son, Williamston Thistleroot Wright, is the eldest child by two years. While James was successful in courting and making a child with Esther, both of the men were deeply attracted to the striking woman. However, being that James was always the less bridled younger brother, Esther was taken in by the honeyed words James whispered to her. Even though pained by this rush in, Williamston always stayed around the edges of their affair and waited for an opportunity for him to pick up the pieces when James was finished having his spontaneous fun.
After Desmond was born and James had already faded from the scene, Williamston was going to make a sweeping appearance but decided, after seeing the fierce feminist strength of Esther, to only provide the slightest assistance. She was strong and a beautiful woman, and when she passed away Desmond was not the only person whose heart was crushed.
Though Desmond was without a guardian, Williamston made sure to guide the young man through life and careers, and helped lead Desmond to the door step of the bookstore Williamston owned. Giving Desmond general labor employment, Williamston was able to provide Desmond a place of security from vicious employers, safety with the supply of food and shelter, and an opportunity to gage Desmond’s natural magical skills, if had any. Though still never getting fully involved in Desmond’s life, Williamston made sure that while he stayed in boarding homes or allies that the places were warm, safe, and the floor felt more like a pillow than a flat slab.
With pride in his throat, Williamston, disguised as Charles McCloud, observed Desmond’s innate desire to learn from the select books that held magical recipes, identification of magic creatures, and other magical information such as regional magic community politics. Though clearly unable to read the information, Williamston made note that Desmond still learned through observing the pictures and parred the information with an imaginative learning.
While Desmond does not have any formal learning of magic, Williamston felt that for him to gain the fullness of his heritage he would need to be taught by the professional teachings of Hogwarts, which is where he attended as a child. Funding the entire trip to the school, the supplies Desmond would require, and toys he would need to be successful, Williamston, still under the name of Charles McCloud, secured the passage and requirements for Desmond to enter Hogwarts to begin his basic, formal, and advanced teaching of the magical world he was a part of but didn’t know – yet.
Thank you for your kind reply and request, and please let my apologize for the bad RP mistake that I made. I was on a conference call at the time and also trying to type up that quickly after reading it since I figured I would have no time after the call lol! I have always loved the name Emma, so the name just stuck out in my mind. lol
Below, I have provided the "correct" RP response and also an expansion of the Bio of Desmond. With the bio, I didn't expand too much on his history because I was worried of providing too much to read, so I paired it down. Also, for the RP, I simple just replaced Emma with the correct name of Evangeline and expanded only slightly. I figured, this would be easier than taking control of Evangelina who could correct Des on his misunderstand of what Evangeline was and why she was looking for a GHOST named Emma, which would likely pull Desmond in, since he has never seen a ghost before!
Corrected RP Response:
Option 1:
Coming around the corner after being startled by a booming voice from a girl who was shouting the requested presence of Ms. Emma Birch. Desmond, red in the face, inched from the shadows and bowed heavily, “Please excuse me, miss; my name is Desmond Wright, an’ I was walking the halls down here. My deepest sorry for startling you, if I had... I was simply exploring the grounds, and dark frightful areas sometimes hold the most interesting secrets. I have also found, that when I am scared – I sometimes am able to be more aware of the interesting things around! Kind of funny, but I learn more when scared.” Trying to be polite, he chuckled into the air and rolled his shoulders. Placing his hands into the air, he showed her that he was holding nothing of any danger to her; just a blank paged journal and pencil. “This was a gift from a good friend of mine, Mr. Charles McCloud, owner of the ‘Letters and Books’ bookstore in Dublin eastside.”
Starring at the ground and with curled shoulders, he waited for Evangeline to respond. Hoping she would not find him strange, he yearned to share the many things he had found so far while exploring the wide open grounds of Hogwarts School; all written or drawn down, of course.
Further Expansion on Bio:
Desmond’s father’s name is James Wright, and is of Pure Blood lineage while the Mother is of Muggle born with no natural magic skills of her own. The couple came together by the persistent courting of James who spoke words of love, care, and hope into Esther’s ears and heart. Being that Esther never new a life of income security or popular status in the community, she was pulled along easily by James. With his romantic promises so alluring, she fell straight into the fantasy that such a handsome and well-dressed man would take care of her and their family for the rest of their lives. Sadly, soon after showing, James was struck with panic at having to have actual responsibility and fled from their lives with no notice. While heart broken, Esther knew that their child still needed to be cared and loved, so she stuck to her responsibility of being a loving mother to her child and teach him how to never run from responsibility; especially when he too was to become a father.
James Wright is the second child of the Mystical Wright Family of Dublin, a heritage that was given incentive to move from their historical roots of England for Ireland fifty years prior. The mother’s name is Catherine Wright and the father is Wilson Wright. The family’s other son, Williamston Thistleroot Wright, is the eldest child by two years. While James was successful in courting and making a child with Esther, both of the men were deeply attracted to the striking woman. However, being that James was always the less bridled younger brother, Esther was taken in by the honeyed words James whispered to her. Even though pained by this rush in, Williamston always stayed around the edges of their affair and waited for an opportunity for him to pick up the pieces when James was finished having his spontaneous fun.
After Desmond was born and James had already faded from the scene, Williamston was going to make a sweeping appearance but decided, after seeing the fierce feminist strength of Esther, to only provide the slightest assistance. She was strong and a beautiful woman, and when she passed away Desmond was not the only person whose heart was crushed.
Though Desmond was without a guardian, Williamston made sure to guide the young man through life and careers, and helped lead Desmond to the door step of the bookstore Williamston owned. Giving Desmond general labor employment, Williamston was able to provide Desmond a place of security from vicious employers, safety with the supply of food and shelter, and an opportunity to gage Desmond’s natural magical skills, if had any. Though still never getting fully involved in Desmond’s life, Williamston made sure that while he stayed in boarding homes or allies that the places were warm, safe, and the floor felt more like a pillow than a flat slab.
With pride in his throat, Williamston, disguised as Charles McCloud, observed Desmond’s innate desire to learn from the select books that held magical recipes, identification of magic creatures, and other magical information such as regional magic community politics. Though clearly unable to read the information, Williamston made note that Desmond still learned through observing the pictures and parred the information with an imaginative learning.
While Desmond does not have any formal learning of magic, Williamston felt that for him to gain the fullness of his heritage he would need to be taught by the professional teachings of Hogwarts, which is where he attended as a child. Funding the entire trip to the school, the supplies Desmond would require, and toys he would need to be successful, Williamston, still under the name of Charles McCloud, secured the passage and requirements for Desmond to enter Hogwarts to begin his basic, formal, and advanced teaching of the magical world he was a part of but didn’t know – yet.