We are currently accepting new applications for Elsewhere!

Posts

This section allows you to view all posts made by this member. Note that you can only see posts made in areas you currently have access to.


Messages - Marina Lamont

Pages: [1] 2 3 ... 5
1
Hi Leah, and welcome!

Your application looks great, but it seems like you forgot the 'About You' section at the very bottom. Please copy/paste the following into your application, then post your entire revised application below and we'll be happy to take another look.

Code: [Select]
[font=archer][size=20px]→ ABOUT YOU.[/size][/font]

[b]Please list any characters you have  on the site (current and previous):[/b]

[b]How did you find us?:[/b]


Also, in your roleplay sample, you mention Leah as a Gryffindor. You don't need to change this, just keep in mind that though we do our best to accommodate your house requests, these are not guaranteed and your character may end up being sorted elsewhere.

2
Archived Applications / Re: Seren Yukimura Application
« on: 03/12/2020 at 22:03 »
Hi Seren!

Let me start out by saying that I absolutely love Seren and his unique background! However, there are a few details which will need to be addressed before your application can be accepted.

First, if your're hoping for Seren to be a first year as your first choice, his birthdate is one year off. He would have been born in 1949 rather than 1950. You can take a look at our handy birth year guide for reference.

Second, in your role play sample, you state that Seren knows how to use the 'dancing feet spell'. As per our Magical Rules this spell (Tarantallegra) requires fourth year levels. Even with Charms as his strength, as a first year, Seren would only have a Charms level of 2 and thus would be unable to pull off such a spell. Please either remove the reference to this spell or choose another. For example, Locomotor Mortis or Locomotor Wibbly might achieve similar results!

Once you've made the required changes, please repost your entire revised application as a response to this thread and we'll be happy to take another look! I know we have quite a few rules and it might be a lot to take in, so if you're ever unsure about anything, please don't hesitate to reach out.

3
Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Gwenaël LeBlanc
« on: 09/10/2020 at 14:25 »
Accepted!

4
Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Marie Jones | Elsewhere Adult
« on: 24/09/2020 at 16:21 »
Accepted!

5
Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Lizzie Banks-Elsewhere Child
« on: 24/09/2020 at 16:19 »
Accepted!

6
Hi Pierce!

You application looks great and all the requested changes seem to have been addressed. However, your levels now amount to a total of 36, therefore 4 points beyond the allotted 32 points. If you could please remove those extra points and reply with your entire revised application, you should be all set.

Thank you!

7
Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Marie Jones | Elsewhere Adult
« on: 17/09/2020 at 14:50 »
Hi Marie!

Your application is coming along nicely! However, there's one small detail in your rp sample that will need to be changed. You state that Marie fixes Amelia Nixon's broken shoe. Fixing, breaking, or otherwise altering an object belonging to another character is considered a mild form of powerplaying. Since Amelia is not a real character, and you can't ask their permission for the reparo spell to be successful, you could instead frame the action as an attempt (ex: "Reparo." She said while pointing her wand at the shoe, hoping to see it fixed.) This would give Amelia the opportunity to decide whether or not her shoe was fixed, or if she would prefer it remained broken.

Also, you've only used up 28 of your allotted 32 magical adult levels. You are free to add in the extra 4 if you wish, though this is entirely up to you.

Once you've made the required change, please post your entire revised application below and we'll be happy to give it another look.

Thanks!

8
Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Ruby Palomer
« on: 12/05/2020 at 22:17 »
Accepted!

9
Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Dahlia Fenwick - Elsewhere Adult
« on: 12/05/2020 at 21:45 »
Accepted!

10
Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Kai Chen || Elsewhere Teen
« on: 12/05/2020 at 21:10 »
Accepted!

11
Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Delia Espinoza
« on: 02/05/2020 at 03:51 »
Accepted!

12
Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Finlay Bramston
« on: 08/04/2020 at 14:49 »
Accepted!

13
Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Alexander Darcy - child
« on: 02/03/2020 at 16:57 »
Accepted!

14
Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Olive Solita
« on: 27/01/2020 at 03:06 »
Accepted!

15
Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Marco Solita
« on: 27/01/2020 at 00:39 »
Accepted!

16
Hi Piper! Welcome to HSNet.

I'd like to start off by saying how wonderfully detailed your application is. It's amazing how much effort you've put into it. However, before we can accept you, there are a few issues which will need to be addressed.

Piper's biography makes it very clear that she has the special abilities of a seer. However, we require such special abilities to be requested prior to all applications that depend upon their acceptance, as admin approval is not a guarantee. We ask that members to have played on our site for a few months in order to acquaint themselves with the site rules, roleplaying guidelines, and magic rules before submitting a request for special abilities. Therefore, you should remove all mention of Piper using seer abilities from her biography.

Secondly, you mention that Piper's father was a member of the SRC and describe it as such:
Quote
When he first started back after the war they took the top Aurora's and made them part of an elite group called Social Reconstruction Committee; Their aim is to restore Wizarding Britain to its former glory.
While the Social Reconstruction Commitee did strive to restore Britain, it was not a group of elite Aurors -- although they were quite welcome to join its ranks nevertheless. The SRC was a group of people from all around the country who organised events, fundraisers, internships, sponsorships, etc. to help those most affected by the war.

Lastly, there are a few instances in Piper's biography where accidental magic is described in a way that doesn't sound quite so accidental.
Quote
"Well I remember my mother telling me she couldn't keep me in my crib because I kept popping out of it when I was tiny baby. She said she'd find me all over the house sleeping in such random places."
Quote
as she looked at him she thought he looked like a toad with his chest puffed out the way it was now. Just like that he turned into a toad making her jump back in surprise; thankfully the moment she jumped back her concentration broke so the little bit of magic she used wore of.
Underage magic is never controlled, nor is it intentional. It is usually born out of moments of strong emotion (anger or fear being the most common culprits) and because it happens on a subconscious level, it is completely uncontrolled. In these case, the former seems far too controlled and unrelated to a specific emotion, whereas the latter reads as being intentional and maintained -- and therefore controlled -- by Piper's concentration. Both cases are too powerful for a child.

If you could please make these changes and reply below with your entire revised application we'll be happy to give it another look. If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to reach out to myself or any other admin via private message or on Discord.

Thank you!

17
Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Sophia Darcy - Elsewhere Adult
« on: 16/01/2020 at 20:19 »
Accepted!

18
Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Calliope Amberghast
« on: 17/10/2019 at 16:54 »
Accepted!

19
Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Isabella Flores
« on: 05/10/2019 at 03:22 »
Accepted!

20
Elsewhere Accepted / Re: Matteo Locricchio
« on: 26/09/2019 at 14:54 »
Accepted!

Pages: [1] 2 3 ... 5