Isabelle Lee Elsewhere Child

[Isabelle Lee]

Character Name: Isabelle Lee
Age: 10
Bloodline: Muggleborn

Parents/Guardians (Are they currently played characters?): Henry Lee(NPC) Alice Lee(NPC)
Residence: London
Do you plan to have a connection to a particular existing place(for example: the daycare): no
Do you wish to be approved as a group with any other characters? If so who and for what IC reason?: no

Please list any other characters you already have at the site: N/A
Biography: (100 words minimum.): Isabelle Lee was the youngest of 3 children the other 2 being Rachel, Bobby.

She was the closest to Rachel yet they were really far apart in age and it was a miracle Isabelle was even born.

She is home schooled and her older brother Bobby is not in school anymore he graduated and moved out.

Isabelle doesn't really have many friends she goes to the park and is often left playing by herself because she is really shy and quiet she likes the swings and will often swing until her mom calls for supper time.

Her and Rachel often have a race to see who can get home first but Rachel always wins because she is older and faster!

She is the youngest of the children and can get away with more but she is so shy and quiet that they have a hard time getting her to even talk.

Roleplay:
Reply as your character to the following:

Godric Park.

Overhead, the sky was a crisp blue, for once clear of the ever-pervasive spongy clouds and rain. The sun was a lemony-yellow presence, high in the Eastern sky, and in front of it zipped three broomsticks in a straight line, or something very like one. One... two..... three... the boys passed, their shouts of excitement echoing as they chased the snitch, a tiny shimmer reflecting the sunlight.

Far below was another, much smaller broomstick.

It trugged along the ground, hugging close to it like a sluggish choo choo train and occasionally shuttering in protest. This was because said stick was currently being occupied by a very small girl who was tugging upward on the front of it with all her might, trying to coax it into doing what it had been expressly designed NOT to do.

"John, I said wait up!" The tiny girl squealed, giving the broomstick another tug.

Begrudgingly, it drifted upward a foot, and then sank, depositing the troublesome girl safely on the ground. Janey Hurst was not pleased. In a huff, she hopped off the toy safety broom, grabbing it firmly and thrusting it handle first into the turf.

Her brother was such a beast. He NEVER let her play! She folded her arms, seething blue eyes fixing on another figure nearby.  "You!" She barked, much more sharply than she meant to.

"...Do you want to play?"

Roleplay Response:
Type your response here. Isabelle walked over to the girl and said "Sure what do you want to play?"

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[Isabelle Lee]

Character Name: Isabelle Lee
Age: 10 (nov. 7th 1940)
Bloodline: Muggleborn
Parents/Guardians (Are they currently played characters?): Henry Lee (NPC) and Alice Lee (NPC)
Residence: London
Do you plan to have a connection to a particular existing place: No

Do you wish to be approved as a group with any other characters? If so who and for what IC reason?: No
Please list any other characters you already have at the site: None
Biography: (100 words minimum.) Isabelle Lee was the youngest of 3 children the other 2 being Rachel, and Bobby.
She was the closest to Rachel yet they were really far apart in age and it was a miracle Isabelle was even born.

She is home schooled and her older brother Bobby is not in school anymore he graduated and moved out.

Isabelle doesn't really have many friends she goes to the park and is often left playing by herself because she is really shy and quiet she likes the swings and will often swing until her mom calls for supper time.

Her and Rachel often have a race to see who can get home first but Rachel always wins because she is older and faster Isabelle likes racing with her sister because its a fun challenge to see who can get there first.

She is the youngest of the children and can get away with more but she is so shy and quiet that they have a hard time getting her to even talk.


Roleplay:
Reply as your character to the following:

Godric Park.

Overhead, the sky was a crisp blue, for once clear of the ever-pervasive spongy clouds and rain. The sun was a lemony-yellow presence, high in the Eastern sky, and in front of it zipped three broomsticks in a straight line, or something very like one. One... two..... three... the boys passed, their shouts of excitement echoing as they chased the snitch, a tiny shimmer reflecting the sunlight.

Far below was another, much smaller broomstick.

It trugged along the ground, hugging close to it like a sluggish choo choo train and occasionally shuttering in protest. This was because said stick was currently being occupied by a very small girl who was tugging upward on the front of it with all her might, trying to coax it into doing what it had been expressly designed NOT to do.

"John, I said wait up!" The tiny girl squealed, giving the broomstick another tug.

Begrudgingly, it drifted upward a foot, and then sank, depositing the troublesome girl safely on the ground. Janey Hurst was not pleased. In a huff, she hopped off the toy safety broom, grabbing it firmly and thrusting it handle first into the turf.

Her brother was such a beast. He NEVER let her play! She folded her arms, seething blue eyes fixing on another figure nearby.  "You!" She barked, much more sharply than she meant to.

"...Do you want to play?"

Roleplay Response:
Type your response here. Isabelle jumped she was alarmed at how loud the girl was then she said "no I have to go home soon..." and almost ran away she can't handle strangers.

How did you find us? Google

[Calypso Ross]

Hi Isabelle, and welcome to the site!

Your application's coming along nicely, there's just one thing that you'll need to edit before we can get you accepted.

Currently, your RP sample is extremely short. While our players do sometimes have short 'one-liner' threads like this, the general rule for most posts is the 3x3 rule (3 paragraphs of at least 3 sentences each). This is so that you give your RP partner (in this case, Janey Hurst) enough for them to be able to respond to easily. You'll need to write a little more in your RP sample to be accepted. If you're unsure about what to write, you could think about why Isabelle isn't used to being around strangers and what she's feeling -- scared? Nervous? Embarassed? You could also write about her opinion of Janey -- does she think the other girl is annoying? Sweet? Friendly? If you write a little about what's going on inside Isabelle's head, that would give Janey's player much more to work with.

Once you've made the required change, please repost your entire revised application below, and we'll be more than happy to take another look. Thanks!

[Isabelle Lee]

Character Name: Isabelle Lee
Age: 10 (nov. 7th 1940)
Bloodline: Muggleborn
Parents/Guardians (Are they currently played characters?): Henry Lee (NPC) and Alice Lee (NPC)
Residence: London
Do you plan to have a connection to a particular existing place: No

Do you wish to be approved as a group with any other characters? If so who and for what IC reason?: No
Please list any other characters you already have at the site: None
Biography: (100 words minimum.) Isabelle Lee was the youngest of 3 children the other 2 being Rachel, and Bobby.
She was the closest to Rachel yet they were really far apart in age and it was a miracle Isabelle was even born.

She is home schooled and her older brother Bobby is not in school anymore he graduated and moved out.

Isabelle doesn't really have many friends she goes to the park and is often left playing by herself because she is really shy and quiet she likes the swings and will often swing until her mom calls for supper time.

Her and Rachel often have a race to see who can get home first but Rachel always wins because she is older and faster Isabelle likes racing with her sister because its a fun challenge to see who can get there first.

She is the youngest of the children and can get away with more but she is so shy and quiet that they have a hard time getting her to even talk.


Roleplay:
Reply as your character to the following:

Godric Park.

Overhead, the sky was a crisp blue, for once clear of the ever-pervasive spongy clouds and rain. The sun was a lemony-yellow presence, high in the Eastern sky, and in front of it zipped three broomsticks in a straight line, or something very like one. One... two..... three... the boys passed, their shouts of excitement echoing as they chased the snitch, a tiny shimmer reflecting the sunlight.

Far below was another, much smaller broomstick.

It trugged along the ground, hugging close to it like a sluggish choo choo train and occasionally shuttering in protest. This was because said stick was currently being occupied by a very small girl who was tugging upward on the front of it with all her might, trying to coax it into doing what it had been expressly designed NOT to do.

"John, I said wait up!" The tiny girl squealed, giving the broomstick another tug.

Begrudgingly, it drifted upward a foot, and then sank, depositing the troublesome girl safely on the ground. Janey Hurst was not pleased. In a huff, she hopped off the toy safety broom, grabbing it firmly and thrusting it handle first into the turf.

Her brother was such a beast. He NEVER let her play! She folded her arms, seething blue eyes fixing on another figure nearby.  "You!" She barked, much more sharply than she meant to.

"...Do you want to play?"

Roleplay Response:
Type your response here. Isabelle jumped she was alarmed at how loud the girl was then she said "no I have to go home soon..." and almost ran away she can't handle strangers. She was scared that the girl was about to play with her she didn't like meeting people because they might be bossy or selfish so she was not intrested in playing with Janey. Then she saw how lonely Janey was and said "Ok what do you want to play?" in a soft voice almost a whisper.

[Calypso Ross]

Thank you for making that change! Unfortunately, your RP still falls a little short of our general minimum of nine sentences. If you could add just a few more sentences, that would give 'Janey' a bit more to respond to.

If you're stuck on things to write about, you could maybe include the following:
1. Why is Isabelle at the park -- did her mum let her go out to play or did she sneak out of the house?
2. Janey has a toy broom... Has Isabelle ever played Quidditch herself? If she has, does she like it/how does she feel about it? If she hasn't, does she want to try it out? Or is she a bit scared of flying?
3. It looks like Janey's been left behind by the other children. Seeing as Isabelle is the youngest child in her family too, does she get left out a lot too? Or are her siblings a bit kinder than Janey's?

You can also take a look at some of the RP samples in our sample applications.

Once you've made the required change, please repost your entire revised application below, and we'll be more than happy to take another look. If you've got any questions, please feel free to PM myself or another administrator. Thanks!

[Isabelle Lee]

Character Name: Isabelle Lee
Age: 10 (nov. 7th 1940)
Bloodline: Muggleborn
Parents/Guardians (Are they currently played characters?): Henry Lee (NPC) and Alice Lee (NPC)
Residence: London
Do you plan to have a connection to a particular existing place: No

Do you wish to be approved as a group with any other characters? If so who and for what IC reason?: No
Please list any other characters you already have at the site: None
Biography: (100 words minimum.) Isabelle Lee was the youngest of 3 children the other 2 being Rachel, and Bobby.
She was the closest to Rachel yet they were really far apart in age and it was a miracle Isabelle was even born.

She is home schooled and her older brother Bobby is not in school anymore he graduated and moved out.

Isabelle doesn't really have many friends she goes to the park and is often left playing by herself because she is really shy and quiet she likes the swings and will often swing until her mom calls for supper time.

Her and Rachel often have a race to see who can get home first but Rachel always wins because she is older and faster Isabelle likes racing with her sister because its a fun challenge to see who can get there first.

She is the youngest of the children and can get away with more but she is so shy and quiet that they have a hard time getting her to even talk.


Roleplay:
Reply as your character to the following:

Godric Park.

Overhead, the sky was a crisp blue, for once clear of the ever-pervasive spongy clouds and rain. The sun was a lemony-yellow presence, high in the Eastern sky, and in front of it zipped three broomsticks in a straight line, or something very like one. One... two..... three... the boys passed, their shouts of excitement echoing as they chased the snitch, a tiny shimmer reflecting the sunlight.

Far below was another, much smaller broomstick.

It trugged along the ground, hugging close to it like a sluggish choo choo train and occasionally shuttering in protest. This was because said stick was currently being occupied by a very small girl who was tugging upward on the front of it with all her might, trying to coax it into doing what it had been expressly designed NOT to do.

"John, I said wait up!" The tiny girl squealed, giving the broomstick another tug.

Begrudgingly, it drifted upward a foot, and then sank, depositing the troublesome girl safely on the ground. Janey Hurst was not pleased. In a huff, she hopped off the toy safety broom, grabbing it firmly and thrusting it handle first into the turf.

Her brother was such a beast. He NEVER let her play! She folded her arms, seething blue eyes fixing on another figure nearby.  "You!" She barked, much more sharply than she meant to.

"...Do you want to play?"

Roleplay Response:
Type your response here. Isabelle jumped she was alarmed at how loud the girl was then she said "no I have to go home soon..." and almost ran away she can't handle strangers. She was scared that the girl was about to play with her she didn't like meeting people because they might be bossy or selfish so she was not intrested in playing with Janey. Then she saw how lonely Janey was and remembered how she felt when her older siblings left her out! She also saw that Janey had a broomstick this fascinated Isabelle because she had never seen someone fly on a broomstick before! She finally decided she wanted to play with Janey because she looked like she needed a friend! "Yeah I'll play with you" she said hoping Janey would want to be her friend.

[Calypso Ross]

Accepted!